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Echo of the past 17 [ENG]
 Note from translator and author: this chapter took 6h to translate. I know my translations are not perfect. Try it yourself. I'm no genius. Just a fan ; )
Before you start reading the second part [starting with words: "three days..."]
please listen to the soundtrack, link to which you can find down below under the first star.

17. Marcin

- Ohhh...You look terribly awful - said the light haired man as a means of saying hello, standing in the opened door, that only a few days ago were a gateway to freedom.
In the newcomers voice you couldn't actually find an ounce of pity, that the words said in Norwegian, might have suggested. The man pre
Echo of the past 15 [ENG]
 Note from the translator: It took close to 5h to translate this chapter.

15. The Blonde

"There is something.
Something that sits there... buried deep, very deep.
Covered by a layer of sand and silt. Covered by everything I was able to throw on top.

I'm pretending that it's not there.
That it never happened.

But despite that... I carry its stigma. Maybe it's not too noticeable, but it somehow shaped me... differently from how I wanted it to happen."

These words... could be said by both of them.
Him and Winter.
Marcin and him.

They both despite two different lives and different history, they have a secret.
A secret with deep roots.
Echo of the past 14 [ENG]
It took 4 hours to translate this chapter

14. The Blonde

Closed eyes.
Head bent back.
Long neck.
Parted lips.

BOOM

Blonde mohawk moved swiftly.
Brows lifted the eye lids followed.
Brown gaze.
Confident and strong.
Staring.

At you.

Hand moving down the cold, vertical stand.
Slowly.
Lightly.
Delicately...

Lips.
Parted again.

Low sound.
Whisper.

Sensual.

Craned neck.
Long fingers leaving red long mark on the skin.
Sliding down the neck.
To his shoulders.

QUIET.

Stare.
At you.
As if there were only him and you.

No one else.

Quiet.
You can hear your breath.
Your heartbeat.

As if in a slow motion.
Eyes. Closing.
Echo of the past 13 [ENG]
This piece took 7,5h to translate.

13. The Redhead

- So what now? - she asked, sitting next to Nivan.
- Well, nothing. He'll be back. And until then we'll be like a long married couple - he answered her, looking down on the unnatural order under his feet... - We'll find you a job and in the mean time we'll paint his room, maybe the rest of the flat as well.
- Ehm... - she grew sad - Nivan I don't have that much savings... I put aside something so I can visit my parents in Tunisia... And I've got Marcin's rent and that's it - she looked at her feet.
Nivan looked at her. He never saw her that depressed. He pulled her close and hugged her.
Echo of the past 12 [ENG]
Okay this is a really good chapter (well all of them are) showing that Kyoux is the Master of Suspense.
This one took 5,5 hours to translate:

12. The Blonde

I was alone in my hotel room.
I was sitting on the edge of a high bed that was probably very comfy for the rest of the world.
But not for me.

Leaning forward with arms propped on my thighs, I was looking dumbly at the white, hairy rug. I was poking at it with my foot checking how soft it was.

I felt as if I made the worst decision in my life.
And it's not about me being hundreds of kilometers from home. Immersed in a different culture, that I have no clue about, which I was never
Echo of the past 07 [ENG]
Note from the translator:
This is not a word for word translation. So there will be words missing, or words added when comparing with the original. I gave my best not to change the contents BUT. Sometimes I just had to. The thing is that Kyoux is playing a lot with form and tense, and that made it that bit more difficult to translate. I wanted to leave as much as possible as it is in the original so that the atmosphere and her writing style is reflected. And that might get English people confused sometimes, as it probably would be written differently if the correct English would be used. Of course you'll find mistakes in the text, so please
Echo of the past 09 [ENG]
Note from the translator:
This is not a word for word translation. So there will be words missing, or words added when comparing with the original. I gave my best not to change the contents BUT. Sometimes I just had to. The thing is that Kyoux is playing a lot with form and tense, and that made it that bit more difficult to translate. I wanted to leave as much as possible as it is in the original so that the atmosphere and her writing style is reflected. And that might get English people confused sometimes, as it probably would be written differently if the correct English would be used. Of course you'll find mistakes in the text, so please
Echo of the past 10 [ENG]
Note from the translator:
This is not a word for word translation. So there will be words missing, or words added when comparing with the original. I gave my best not to change the contents BUT. Sometimes I just had to. The thing is that Kyoux is playing a lot with form and tense, and that made it that bit more difficult to translate. I wanted to leave as much as possible as it is in the original so that the atmosphere and her writing style is reflected. And that might get English people confused sometimes, as it probably would be written differently if the correct English would be used. Of course you'll find mistakes in the text, so please
Echo of the past 03 [ENG]
Chapter with better formatting, in PDF file: http://xkyoux.wordpress.com/2012/05/09/story-about-boys-love/

*Author notes available at the beginning of chapter one*

Note from the translator:
This is not a word for word translation. So there will be words missing, or words added when comparing with the original. I gave my best not to change the contents, BUT sometimes I just had to. Of course you'll find mistakes in the text, so please instead of mocking my language skills, just sit back and enjoy a beautiful love story. I decided to try to translate it because I adore their story so much. It would be a pity for others not to be able to read
Echo of the past 04 [ENG]
Chapter with better formatting, in PDF file: http://xkyoux.wordpress.com/2012/05/09/story-about-boys-love/

*Author notes available at the beginning of chapter one*

Note from the translator: This is not a word for word translation. So there will be words missing, or words added when comparing the original. I tried my best not to change the contents. BUT, sometimes I just had to. The thing is that Kyoux plays a lot with form and tense, and that made it that much more difficult to translate. I wanted to leave as much as possible as it was in the original so that the atmosphere and her writing style were reflected. And that might get English pe
Echo of the past 08 [ENG]
Note from the translator:
This is not a word for word translation. So there will be words missing, or words added when comparing with the original. I gave my best not to change the contents BUT. Sometimes I just had to. The thing is that Kyoux is playing a lot with form and tense, and that made it that bit more difficult to translate. I wanted to leave as much as possible as it is in the original so that the atmosphere and her writing style is reflected. And that might get English people confused sometimes, as it probably would be written differently if the correct English would be used. Of course you'll find mistakes in the text, so please
Echo of the past 05 [ENG]
Chapter with better formatting, in PDF file: http://xkyoux.wordpress.com/2012/05/09/story-about-boys-love/

*Author notes available at the beginning of chapter one*

Note from the translator: This is not a word for word translation. So there will be words missing, or words added when comparing the original. I tried my best not to change the contents. BUT, sometimes I just had to. The thing is that Kyoux plays a lot with form and tense, and that made it that much more difficult to translate. I wanted to leave as much as possible as it was in the original so that the atmosphere and her writing style were reflected. And that might get English pe
Echo of the past 02 [ENG]
Chapter with better formatting, in PDF file: http://xkyoux.wordpress.com/2012/05/09/story-about-boys-love/

*Author notes available at the beginning of chapter one*

Note from the translator:
This is not a word for word translation. So there will be words missing, or words added when comparing with the original. I gave my best not to change the contents, BUT sometimes I just had to. Of course you'll find mistakes in the text, so please instead of mocking my language skills, just sit back and enjoy a beautiful love story. I decided to try to translate it because I adore their story so much. It would be a pity for others not to be able to read
Nivan's dream
Nivan's Dream

It was one of those realistic ones.
I mean... everything was so damn realistic in it, but in the real world its probability is less than nil.
Normally after dreams like that, when I wake up, I'm happy that in the end it was only the work of my imagination.
But today it was the other way around.
And I'm a bit shocked by that realisation.

The dream was a bit like a movie, like a slide show.
I had my own place but I lived alone. And that's not a promising outlook for the future. No matter how you look at it. The dream was abstract enough to hold on to the hope that the reality will be different. And I was older, not by much
Echo of the past 01 [ENG]
All chapters are under correction

Chapter with better formatting, in PDF file: http://xkyoux.wordpress.com/2012/05/09/story-about-boys-love/

A few words from the author:
The chapter below has come into being spontaneously, for fun, without the bigger concept of writing any more chapters. It wasn’t supposed to have any form of continuity, and the thread of Marcin & Nivan - the two heroes in this story - was meant as a note of spice in their created lives. Both characters were created for the purpose of a role playing game, both of them had partners in their lives as well as separate histories. And so it was meant to stay... in the beg
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Author: *Kyoux
Translator: ~schiotka :heart:
Editor: ~JacquelineMonaie :heart:


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~hacktuih Mar 17, 2013
babe, i think you really intended to kill peeps with your masterpiece~ *dies* XDD
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~redflowerblooming Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
love this sooo much!!! love the fact that marcin and nivan can fight and scream at each other, but then find a way to compromise and still try to make their relationship better!!!! I hope they end up together forever!!!!! :D
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*Kyoux Feb 11, 2013
Aww, thank you :D
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~xmilax Dec 30, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
have you ever thought of making a facebook page or an account on twitter to spread more your work? just entered to twitter and thought maybe it didn't occur to you...
keep writing such amazing chapters!! :blowkiss:
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*Kyoux Jan 6, 2013
I thought about it. I will do it... someday xD

Thank you <3
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Mood: Love ~JoaoJA Dec 30, 2012
I fel in love with Nivan even before reading your stories. But noow Ive read every chapter everything became clear and I came to love every character you've introduced. I must say you really have an interesting way of writting. Believe me I hate books and long stories make me lose interest but you managed to make me read 19 chapters of your story voluntarily, You should get a grammy for that ;). A lot of credits for the translator for doing such a great work that even I who's first langues is not english can read the storie with this much joy. ( Never found any faults in your translating I even found it funny when I read bare backing once:p) And a lot of thanks to the editor even though I dont know what an editor does. Thanku guys keep up the great work and I look forward to the next chapter.
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~JacquelineMonaie Jan 5, 2013  Student Writer
That makes my day (I am the editor) and I am sure it makes Anna's (translator) day too! She is the one who does the really hard part of turning Polish into English and then I take that and turn it into "American English" and work out the more pesky grammar rules and help with specific saying that only a native speaker would know. It is a real joy, as I too stayed up and read the whole story in one night because I couldn't put it down.
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~JoaoJA Jan 6, 2013
You're welcome! Both of you are doing a great work and i think i am speaking for all English talking fans. Keep it up cause you make it possible for us to enjoy this story with the rest of the polish readers. So thank you ;)
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*Kyoux Dec 30, 2012
;_:

I'm soo happy, because you like my story ans my style of writting.

Thank you so much for your kind words ;_:

But it's all thanks to the translator and editor.
Editor improves/fixes the mistakes :)
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~JoaoJA Dec 30, 2012
Youre welcome and thx for explaning it helped a lot!
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